Conquered by the Moretti Twins. Comments
Jordan Davies
really do enjoyed reading this look only small general confused but loving this so far
08/02/2025 11:58Saori Shishido
quite like the story so far and really liking the characters.
07/26/2025 03:18
Visitor
Y is this chapter duplicated, it starts and ends with the same paragraphs
07/25/2025 16:27Visitor
i love it so far, for some reason i really want enzo to get that snake and scare everyone lol
07/13/2025 22:54Visitor
I love it so much
07/12/2025 22:15Visitor
love it so far
07/12/2025 04:05Visitor
I love this book it is very interesting and intense.
07/10/2025 12:13Visitor
Luan is misheard as a female - should say he not she
07/10/2025 05:02Visitor
Luan is misheard as a female - should say he not she
07/10/2025 05:02Visitor
its really interesting and I like how the main lead uses words smartly.its kind of cool and easy.
07/10/2025 01:14Visitor
a very good book
06/28/2025 00:20Michelle White
I don't understand what's going on with this second story. is this the Alex from the first book when he was young? this is confusing. is it a prequel to The First book? it makes no sense to me.
11/08/2024 04:20Amanda Franjic
The idea itself is nice, although I gotta admit I am a little torn whether I like the story or not... It is not because of your lack of knowledge regarding the language, but mostly due to you seemingly just being confused most of the time. More than anything you seem really confused about your own characters. You keep on misgendering them, especially Luan, the amount of times you depicted him as a female is astonishing. Also your kept on changing your mind about who Enzo's actual brother is, sometimes it's Alex, sometimes the other one, even though it is not always clear from the words, but in the context of the setting, it is. Also, you also kept on switching POV's, even though a chapter was written in a certain character's POV, which you clearly displayed each time, you kept on suddenly writing from another's perspective. Lastly, which could be attributed to your level of understanding of the English language, you kept on switching between tenses.
10/19/2024 01:03
